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A Bittersweet Summer

by Acoustic Sensitivity


A Bittersweet Summer

The summer is here but I feel so cold
I feel so lost even in my own home
Is this day going to be over?
It is just getting too rough

I walked out our door
And took a stroll for awhile
I went into a stream
Of people passing by
Then I saw you in Curls
With he
Instead of me

This bright day is getting darker
Will I lay down my case?
Will I need to get by?
Or just resume my chase
If love is a killer
I'll bleed 'till the end
I won't leave this place
Without you in my arms

I have been here so long
Is it the right time to move?
They were on that front
It won't be over 'till noon
Do I need to go?
Or wait
And settle down
Where palm trees grow

They've got some friends
That I hardly ever know
I saw them sometimes
But to hell with the world
I walk step by step
With the hopes of
Getting back what is mine

This bright day is getting darker
Will I lay down my case?
Will I need to get by?
Or just resume my chase
If love is a killer
I'll bleed 'till the end
I won't leave this place
Without you in my arms (2x)

I saw you, it's time
To unloosen my loads
I'll show you my scars
So you can see that it's worst
But then I saw you smile
For the first time
Within my eyes

This bright day is getting darker
Will I lay down my case?
Will I need to get by?
Or just resume my chase
If love is a killer
I'll bleed 'till the end
I won't leave this place
Without you in my arms

If you can keep that smile with him...(2x)
Keep that smile with him
(I'm going back home)



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I can't think of a better title and I this is the only thing I could think of. If you have suggestions just write it down.


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Tue Dec 25, 2007 9:18 pm
MadHatter says...



Good job. I've been feeling that way lately as well. I know nothing of lyrics and how to critique them so I have nothing to offer except I felt it a little forced if you know where I'm coming from.




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Tue Dec 25, 2007 9:14 pm
nothingface says...



that was awesome!!!!!!!!!!!!!! hope you keep posting!





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