Good job. I've been feeling that way lately as well. I know nothing of lyrics and how to critique them so I have nothing to offer except I felt it a little forced if you know where I'm coming from.
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A Bittersweet Summer
The summer is here but I feel so cold
I feel so lost even in my own home
Is this day going to be over?
It is just getting too rough
I walked out our door
And took a stroll for awhile
I went into a stream
Of people passing by
Then I saw you in Curls
With he
Instead of me
This bright day is getting darker
Will I lay down my case?
Will I need to get by?
Or just resume my chase
If love is a killer
I'll bleed 'till the end
I won't leave this place
Without you in my arms
I have been here so long
Is it the right time to move?
They were on that front
It won't be over 'till noon
Do I need to go?
Or wait
And settle down
Where palm trees grow
They've got some friends
That I hardly ever know
I saw them sometimes
But to hell with the world
I walk step by step
With the hopes of
Getting back what is mine
This bright day is getting darker
Will I lay down my case?
Will I need to get by?
Or just resume my chase
If love is a killer
I'll bleed 'till the end
I won't leave this place
Without you in my arms (2x)
I saw you, it's time
To unloosen my loads
I'll show you my scars
So you can see that it's worst
But then I saw you smile
For the first time
Within my eyes
This bright day is getting darker
Will I lay down my case?
Will I need to get by?
Or just resume my chase
If love is a killer
I'll bleed 'till the end
I won't leave this place
Without you in my arms
If you can keep that smile with him...(2x)
Keep that smile with him
(I'm going back home)
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I can't think of a better title and I this is the only thing I could think of. If you have suggestions just write it down.
Good job. I've been feeling that way lately as well. I know nothing of lyrics and how to critique them so I have nothing to offer except I felt it a little forced if you know where I'm coming from.
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